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Reviewer: zucani25 Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 07.20.2012 21:00:51 Title: Chapter 1- It Just Began

Please finish this, it's one of those stories you gotta know! *begs on hands and knees for story*

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Date: 10.11.2010 00:40:26 Title: Chapter 2- Meet Athena

Poor Athena, sounds to me like Bruce needs an ass whooping for what he has done to his daughter! The beginning was perfect but I noticed the bad spelling and grammer near the end.

Word of advice, don't rush yourself to get the chapter done. I've done that a lot and it makes for a bad read. (When I look back at it later on I scratch my own head to figure out what the hell I was trying to say! lol)



Author's Response:

yeah I know but I wasn't rushing I was very sleeply and thats what I think it happen but thanks for telling me :D

Reviewer: Migalouch Signed [Report This]
Date: 10.01.2010 08:08:19 Title: Chapter 1- It Just Began

Really interesting first chapter and really heart pulling.  Hurts that Batman could even say that and it hurts even more that Diana died possibly because of something he did.  Hypotyla is an Amazon so of course she wouldn't want the child's father to be in their life, but I am sure Batman is going to bypass that small problem.

Really great first chapter and I really want to see where this goes update soon please!



Author's Response:

aww thanks and I hope so. Don't worry it will work out for the bat but don't hate later on in the story cuz it will get messy but it will work out in the end. I'm a sucker for happy ending so don't worry about that part and working on the second chapter now and will be posted on soon :D

Reviewer: Chaosmob Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 10.01.2010 05:23:04 Title: Chapter 1- It Just Began

Great start to I hope is along and wonderful story Fanofwonderwoman. I would offer my help but my grammar and spelling isn't as good as yours. ;)



Author's Response:

that okay just some pointer here and there would be good. and it will... I hope... just don't hate later on in the story. There will be a happy ending :D

Reviewer: Rachyzord Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 10.01.2010 00:04:00 Title: Chapter 1- It Just Began

I like it and I'm interested to see where it goes. :-) It's interesting to think of Hippolyta raising Diana's child since they can be quite different.

I would definitely say to run it through a spell checker before posting. Open Office is a free word processor that has a built in spell check. You can download it from their website if you need a better WP.

But really if the story is written well people don't really care that much about minor spelling or grammar errors and yours is captivating so far.

 

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