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Reviewer: Flightt94 Signed [Report This]
Date: 01.24.2017 02:45:02 Title: Revelations

I was going to complain that it ended, but you said there's more series to come

Author's Response:

There is, but it is going slow due to some significant work changes in the real world.  At the moment, I am doing mostly beta work and some support work in other fandoms.  I actually do have two of my stories in progress, and go abck and forth between wanting to complete them in thier entirety or releasing in chapters.  I actually have the entire series mapped out.  You can actually read the detail on that here - Katarr's Head Canon.  It lists the stories I want to write, where they fit in my DCAU "Head Canon" and other related details.

Thanks for taking the time to post your feedback - I really appreciate it.   

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Date: 01.24.2017 02:39:54 Title: Paris, Fulfilled

Bruce has blue eyes not brown, especially in the show

Author's Response:

Actually, I researched this - they changed color multiple times during the Justice League series, so there really isn't a canon color to go with.  I choose brown because he had dark eyes in the dance scenes in Paris (and because I think they look better).   

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Date: 01.24.2017 02:16:08 Title: Meta Claus

Woo-Hoo I love this

Author's Response:

Which part?  When you think about it, in a world full of Meta's, Aliens and extra-dimensional beings, Santa Clause seems pretty tame.  

Thanks for your comments!

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Date: 01.24.2017 02:07:59 Title: Ten

Aww I love them and his choice to tell her his secret

Author's Response:

Thanks!  That was a pretty easy decision.  "Comfort and Joy" takes place right before the three part "StarCrossed" episode that ended season 2.  That was the episode where Bruce outed everybody's secret identities.  Diana wasn't surprised by his revelation, so I figured he had already told her and used that in my story. 

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Date: 06.11.2016 06:05:21 Title: Sledgehammer

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Reviewer: Martus Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 10.10.2014 19:16:27 Title: Revelations

awesome..totally waiting to see what you'll take it with the fillers that is;)

Author's Response:

Thank you for your review.  As a preview, some of the stories I am contemplating include:

  • What happens at Wayne manor after the Watchtower is destroyed.
  • What causes Bruce to give in and start a secret relationship with Diana (which explains why there are fewer JLU stories with them).
  • The event that finally allows them to start a serious open relationship, including the villian who convinces Bruce to do so.



Reviewer: Lloyd RPGFan Signed [Report This]
Date: 10.10.2014 15:34:21 Title: Revelations

Nice conclusion. I love how they both came to the same realization.

Author's Response:

Thanks!!!  I wanted them to reach that realization independantly and then NOT act on it.  It puts a different perspective on the remaining JLU stories that touch on thier relationship if you believe they are already in love.  Bruce will continue to fight a battle he secretly hopes to lose.  Diana will have her patience tested over and over as she wears him down.  I already know the event that finally allows them to be together but it takes nearly three years. I just have to decide on how to account for about eighteen months of that.  It would definately have to be a major event to keep them apart that long.

Reviewer: Lloyd RPGFan Signed [Report This]
Date: 09.30.2014 22:23:08 Title: Paris, Fulfilled

I think this chapter turned out really great. Of course, if you compare this interpretation of Batman to Miller's Psycho-Bat or Morrisson's Bat-God, this Bruce does sound a bit too gentle, but it is very faithful to the DCAU version in my opinion.

Author's Response:

I don't know if I mentioned it anywhere except my bio, but I prefer the DCAU Batman the best, but not if he ends up as the bitter old man in Batman Beyond.  This is the point in his history that I think he is most susceptible to Diana's charms, especially at the Holidays.  It's not long after this that the Thanagarians arrive, which leads to next established point in thier history, and a chance for me to try yet another "life at the Wayne mansion story".  Anyway, thanks a lot for the review.  I really appreciate it.   

Reviewer: siran Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09.29.2014 06:49:51 Title: Paris, Fulfilled

The best part in this chapter was when Bruce said what Christmas meant to him. However I can't picture batman twirling on poles. I am going to remember this for when I watch the movie this year.

Cute chapter

Author's Response:

Thanks a ton for your feedback.  The problem with the switched POV is don't get to hear Bruce's internal rationaliztions for spending four hours dancing with Diana.  By switching it from something that might be construed as romantic into a "training routine" he actually gets to play it safe, plus he gets to test his new holographic "playground".  He actually approaches the routine the same way the same way he masters a kata, trying to perfect the physical movements and subtle nuances.  It's more of a workout than a dance to him, but as the night goes on, it get's harder and harder to ignore what's really happening.  In the last routine, he drops the pretense and just decides to enjoy himself.  I may actually have to consider adding that bit of detail to the final chapter, if people think that adds value. 

Having said all of that, I did try to keep it light on purpose, similar to the original "Comfort and Joy".

Reviewer: Martus Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09.25.2014 22:36:12 Title: Meta Claus

First off the chapter was great

The POVs are ok (didn't get lost)

You can add a little more details about the character but not too much; )

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review!  I am actually getting more comfortable with the POV switching.  THe next Chapter is my long (in terms of content - more things happening, but detail eleve stays about the same).

Reviewer: Classic Cowboy Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09.22.2014 22:58:38 Title: Meta Claus

Ha! called it on Alfred's cooking

the POV is fine with me, it's no trouble keeping up what's going on.

you're the author, so you flesh it out as much as you like. Loving it so far so you make the call.

the movie list was very believable as well as the offering from Bruce.

up till now she's had him eating out of her hands, now White Christmas + hot chocolate, the tide could turn in Mr Wayne's favor.

Great story so far, keep it coming!

Author's Response:

Really appreciate the ongoing feedback - thanks!  The movie list was a tough one, especially for J'onn.  I had to throw in Die Hard.  It was my official favorite before I discovered White Christmas.

Reviewer: Classic Cowboy Signed [Report This]
Date: 09.22.2014 22:01:20 Title: Ten

Heavenly aroma, can't be Bruce's cooking... it has to be Alfred's work.

Glad to see him opening up to her, seeing them come together like this is great...

Keep it up!

Author's Response:

How is it that the man who can do anything can't cook?  The only answer I can come up with is that if you grow up eating Alfred's cooking, why bother learning?  Nice catch....thanks for the review!

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Date: 09.22.2014 21:53:32 Title: Sledgehammer

at the " Wham there it is sledgehammer" part the Miley Cyrus song "Wreckingball" popped in my head...

very good start, he's already puddy in her hand...

loving the fluff, and on to the next chap

Author's Response:

Interesting observation.  I am SO bad with music that any reaction like that is bonus!  Having said that, wait for chapter four when I try it on purpose.  We'll see how it goes.  Thanks!

Reviewer: Chaosmob Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09.22.2014 15:18:10 Title: Meta Claus

That was great, your questions about switching POV was okay with me. I never got lost. The detail was great as well. Not to much yet enough to fill in your own ideas. Keep up the fine work.

Author's Response:

I really appreciate the feedback.  This is my "warm up" story, and it's hard to tell if certain things work for everyone else the way they work in my head.  Personally, I like the challange of writing Diana's POV.  That's coming up in the next chapter, so we'll see how it goes.

Reviewer: Lloyd RPGFan Signed [Report This]
Date: 09.22.2014 09:46:53 Title: Meta Claus

Get away from there, Bruce! She's using her Amazonian powers to lure you away from your mission! ... XD Just Kidding!

It's a really nice story so far. Batman can really be surprisingly warm, huh? ;)

Author's Response:

If anyone could lure him away, it would be her :)  As far as a warm and fuzzy Batman, never gonna happen.  Bruce on the other hand... that's a different story.  That is why I had him change out of the Bat suit.  It allows him to set that persona aside, something that Diana realizes in the next chapter.  Thanks for your review! 

Reviewer: Chaosmob Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09.20.2014 15:48:00 Title: Ten

Awesome update, I love that Batman is letting Diana in without pushing her away. Keep up the fine work. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback.  I really appreciate it coming from one of the most prolific authors on the site.  As I mentioned in my bio, I don't see Batman quite as dark as sometimes he is portraid.  If he doesn't let her and Clark in a little, the "Trinity" wouldn't exist.  Still... it's not going to be easy.  His head and his heart are in constant conflict.

Reviewer: Ariadna Signed [Report This]
Date: 09.19.2014 04:00:34 Title: Sledgehammer

I really liked this first chapter, specially the way you described Batma's inner thoughts, and the way he sees Diana, as a "problem" that needs to be solved. Kudos for the story, looking forward to read more.

Author's Response:

Ah, thanks a lot.  That part came naturally from the detective in him....  "I puzzle, therfore I resolve". 

Reviewer: Lloyd RPGFan Signed [Report This]
Date: 09.18.2014 14:13:38 Title: Sledgehammer

I just love how you write Bruce's internal monologue. It sounds so... accurate. ;)

Author's Response:

Thank you.  I had to work on that.  He's actually not too bad.  It's harder with Diana, but my wif proofs my work, which helps.  Eventually, I am going to have some stories with Harley Quinn in them, which will be the ultimate challange.  How do you write near crazy?

Reviewer: Martus Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09.18.2014 10:27:36 Title: Sledgehammer

I love it...alot of fics i've read before,always show batman entering a room without the doors hissing i like the way you expalained it:)

Author's Response:

Thank you for the review.  As I see it, Batman never misses a chance to build on the mystique surrounding him, even with his peers.  Since he built the station, I figure he added all sorts of features like that.   

Reviewer: Chaosmob Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 09.18.2014 05:20:52 Title: Sledgehammer

HAHAHA. I loved it, very cute. You almost make me wish it was Christmas. Great story, keep up the fine work. :)

Author's Response:

Thanks!  I actually thought about waiting until the holiday season to release it, but it's kind of a lead in to other stories I hope to write.  Sort of a fill in the blanks" approach... tell you what happens outside of the official stories.

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